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Clare's Chill out Zone Part three


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I'm good thanks :thumb_yello: and you?

wow that's great why don't you post it?

 

 

OK as u asked me here it is. The poem is based on Stuck in Middle, and my interpretation of this song is basically that he has reached the age that he wants to break away from his family and become independent and discover who he really is! But his famil'y affection and his affection is keeping him from doing this, thus he is stuck in the middle. This poem is written from his perspective and is talking to his mother, possibly grandmother! Anyway, tell me what u guys think of it? It is still in the editing stages so may be in need of some changing!!!

 

 

 

 

Don’t look at me like that,

I need to do this,

I need to break free

 

We’re a close family,

And nothing will come between us

 

But, the boy you know is all grown up

And he needs to fly away

To realise who he really is.

 

I’m sorry for what I said,

It was never meant to hurt you

But you needed to know the truth!

 

This has to happen,

I have to do this

So, please do not use our family,

To get me to stay!

 

I need your support, not your bitter words!

I need your smile, not your scorn.

I need you to be understanding, not judgemental.

 

Please listen to me,

I have not said this to split the family

Or to break your heart.

 

I am saying this so that,

When we go our separate ways,

I will know that I never lied to you!

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OK as u asked me here it is. The poem is based on Stuck in Middle, and my interpretation of this song is basically that he has reached the age that he wants to break away from his family and become independent and discover who he really is! But his famil'y affection and his affection is keeping him from doing this, thus he is stuck in the middle. This poem is written from his perspective and is talking to his mother, possibly grandmother! Anyway, tell me what u guys think of it? It is still in the editing stages so may be in need of some changing!!!

 

 

 

 

Don’t look at me like that,

I need to do this,

I need to break free

 

We’re a close family,

And nothing will come between us

 

But, the boy you know is all grown up

And he needs to fly away

To realise who he really is.

 

I’m sorry for what I said,

It was never meant to hurt you

But you needed to know the truth!

 

This has to happen,

I have to do this

So, please do not use our family,

To get me to stay!

 

I need your support, not your bitter words!

I need your smile, not your scorn.

I need you to be understanding, not judgemental.

 

Please listen to me,

I have not said this to split the family

Or to break your heart.

 

I am saying this so that,

When we go our separate ways,

I will know that I never lied to you!

 

oooh that's exactly what i thought he was trying to say.. i love itt:thumb_yello: but maybe replace 'bitter words' with something else because it's a direct quotes from the song?

you are an excellent poet indeed :bleh:

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oooh that's exactly what i thought he was trying to say.. i love itt:thumb_yello: but maybe replace 'bitter words' with something else because it's a direct quotes from the song?

you are an excellent poet indeed :bleh:

 

Thankyou,you are too kind, I just like writing, and I think I should chaneg those words, I will let u know what I have changed them too but I am jus going to a friend's house now so I will be on later

 

Bye xxx

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